2014.01.03

2014-01-03 · 첨삭 강사 Kristel

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topic. Are you agree with Electronic books as the textbook? Nowadays, Electronic books offer us a chance to read a book anywhere anytime and it also has strong points. Therefore, paper books are changed in to E-book in the class settings. Facing this issue, different perspectives would surface. Some people would think that E-book is more efficient than paper book while other people could prefer paper book. However, I am not agree with educational trend which is being substituted textbook as E-book. The reasons are as follows: academic atmosphere and physical emotion. When it comes to academic atmosphere, I deny the efficiency of E-book. If schools choose to use E-book in class, it would have many bad factors. First, teacher can not notice what student do with electronic device. Second, student may not concentrate on the class easily because there are certain temptations such as web-surfing and text message during the class. Therefore, it will spoil the classroom airs.

강사 첨삭

Hello there my dear!! Thanks for sending me this. This is an interesting topic. Great job in presenting your points. Keep writing to improve more. ^^ Have a great weekend!! T.Kristel- topic. Are you agree with Electronic books as the textbook? >> TOPIC: Do you agree with Electronic books as textbooks?Nowadays, Electronic books offer us a chance to read a book anywhere anytime and it also has strong points. >> CORRECT!! Therefore, paper books are changed in to E-book in the class settings. >> CORRECT!!  Facing this issue, different perspectives would surface. >> CORRECT!! Some people would think that E-book is more efficient than paper book while other people could prefer paper book. >> Some people would think that an E-book is more efficient than a paper book. However, other people would think otherwise.  However, I am not agree with educational trend which is being substituted textbook as E-book. >> Personally, I don\'t agree with the educational trend which is substituting textbooks to E-books. The reasons are as follows: academic atmosphere and physical emotion. >> CORRECT!! CORRECT!!When it comes to academic atmosphere, I deny the efficiency of E-book. If schools choose to use E-book in class, it would have many bad factors. >> CORRECT!! ( You could also say, bad effects instead of bad factors) First, teacher can not notice what student do with electronic device. >> First, the teacher cannot notice/control what students would do with their electronic devices. Second, student may not concentrate on the class easily because there are certain temptations such as web-surfing and text message during the class. >> Second, students may not concentrate on the class easily because there are certain distractions/temptations such as web surfing and text messaging during the class. Therefore, it will spoil the classroom airs. >> Therefore, it could spoil the classroom airs/ atmosphere/ mood.

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