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2015-11-17 · 첨삭 강사 Alice

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It is better to live in a small town than a big city. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Use not more than 200 words excluding articles and prepositions. In my case I don't think live in a small town better than a big city.Because live in big city,your life is comfotable.and Some basic services in the residential districts like rubbish-collection, newspaper and milk-delivery, daily-life convenience information provision touch the life of a lot of families.child education is good. The big city the traffic is convinent.There are a lot of port,and airport. if you want to go anywhere you will take some transport. I like an often boisterous place — that’s what makes them fun and safe. That's all.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this topic. Small towns and big cities have both pros and cons, and it really depends on the person what kind of lifestyle he wants to have. Small town might not be convenient and accessible to everything, but the tranquility and peacefulness make me want to stay in it. It also reminds me of my childhood. Anyway, kindly go over the corrections I have for you. Catch you later! ~Teacher Alice   It is better to live in a small town than a big city. >> Correct!In my case I don\'t think live in a small town better than a big city. >> In my case, I don\'t think living in a small town is better than living in a big city. Because live in big city,your life is comfotable. >> That is because living in a big city makes your life comfortable. >> OR: Your life is comfortable when you live in a big city. and Some basic services in the residential districts like rubbish-collection, newspaper and milk-delivery, daily-life convenience information provision touch the life of a lot of families. >> Also, some basic services in the residential districts like rubbish collection, newspaper and milk delivery, daily-life convenience, information provision are always available to a lot of families. child education is good. >> Child education is good. The big city the traffic is convinent. >> Traffic in a big city is convenient. There are a lot of port,and airport. >> There are a lot of ports and airports. if you want to go anywhere you will take some transport. >> If you want to go somewhere, you will need to take transportation. I like an often boisterous place — that’s what makes them fun and safe. >> I like to like in a boisterous place as that makes me enjoy life and feel safe. That\'s all. >> Correct!

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