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2016-11-25 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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If I would have a job at a football stadium, I would be a owner of a football stadium. I would do many jobs related to management of the stadium in a office of the stadium. For example, managing facilities of the stadium, planing events not only football games, and accounting of incomes of the stadium. So, I would make a lot of money about one hundred thousand dollars per month!

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Hello [이름]! ^^   Thank you for sharing your thoughts about the composition topic. ^^ Being the owner would make you a lot of money but imagine the stress that you would have to put up with! @.@   See you later!   All good things, ==Teacher Charlie==   If I would have a job at a football stadium, I would be a owner of a football stadium.I would do many jobs related to management of the stadium in a office of the stadium.For example, managing facilities of the stadium, planing events not only football games, and accounting of incomes of the stadium. So, I would make a lot of money about one hundred thousand dollars per month!   >> If I would have a job at a football stadium, I would be the owner of it. I would be in charge of managerial duties for example supervising the facilities of the stadium, planning the events not limited to football games and accounting the earnings of the stadium. In this way, I would be able to make a lot of money; probably around $100,000 per month!

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