2017/01/09 Homework

2017-01-10 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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I disagree with that classmates are more influent on a child's success than parents in school. Of course, classmates are also important in school because children spend most of the time in a day with them than parents. However, children's characters are basically affected by parents and they choose their friends who have matched character with the children and have more influent on a child's success than classmates. In a conclusion, parents are more influent on it because children's basic characters are built by their parents.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^

I definitely agree with your opinion. Thank you for sharing what you think.

All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==

I disagree with that classmates are more influent on a child\'s success than parents in school. Of course, classmates are also important in school because children spend most of the time in a day with them than parents. However, children\'s characters are basically affected by parents and they choose their friends who have matched character with the children and have more influent on a child\'s success than classmates. In a conclusion, parents are more influent on it because children\'s basic characters are built by their parents.

>> I disagree that classmates are a more important influence on a child\'s success than their parents in school. There is no denying that having classmates are important in school because children spend most of their days with them in school rather than with their parents. However, a child\'s character (personality) is primarily based on how their parents raised them so they look for friends who they get along with; which will then contribute in a child\'s success.. Henceforth, parents are a more important influence in a child\'s success because parents are responsible in building a child\'s character (personality).

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