2017/01/23 Homework

2017-01-24 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

학생이 쓴 원문

I disagree with boys and girls should attend separate schools because, I think it may cause to make each part have wrong prejudice on each of them. Most of the people who agree with this topic say that boys and girls have to be separated because to make them concentrate on study and to prevent them from some sexual problem. However, I think, when they become adults, some of them would have a difficulties in how to treat each part because they didn't have a experience. So, from childhood, boys and girls need to get used to formation of relationship with different genders.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^


Thank you for answering yesterday\'s homework. ^^ I definitely agree with your opinion.


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==



I disagree with boys and girls should attend separate schools because, I think it may cause to make each part have wrong prejudice on each of them. Most of the people who agree with this topic say that boys and girls have to be separated because to make them concentrate on study and to prevent them from some sexual problem. However, I think, when they become adults, some of them would have a difficulties in how to treat each part because they didn\'t have a experience. So, from childhood, boys and girls need to get used to formation of relationship with different genders.

>> I disagree with the statement that boys and girls should attend separate schools because I think it may cause prejudice between them. Most people who agree with this idea have a belief that when boys and girls are separated, they would be able to concentrate on their studies and would encourage sexual abstinence. However, in my opinion, this might lead to difficulties for the children in building relationships when they reach maturity since they don\'t have any experience in dealing with the opposite gender. Therefore, boys and girls at an early age should get used to forming relationships with the opposite gender.

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