2017/01/25 Homework

2017-01-31 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

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If I would choose a famous person in my country to build a statue or monument to honor, I would choose "BAK GEUN HYE" who is a Korea president now. Because, she awakened all Korean including me, indifference to politics would result in a crisis of a country. So, to prevent the same situation in future, I would choose "BAK GEUN HYE" and record her all misdeed. Finally, I will write down that we have to pay attention to a politics for our family, friends, and country on the statue or monument.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^

Thank you for answering last Wednesday\'s composition topic. ^^

All good things,
==Teacher Charlie==

If I would choose a famous person in my country to build a statue or monument to honor, I would choose \"BAK GEUN HYE\" who is a Korea president now. Because, she awakened all Korean including me, indifference to politics would result in a crisis of a country. So, to prevent the same situation in future, I would choose \"BAK GEUN HYE\" and record her all misdeed. Finally, I will write down that we have to pay attention to a politics for our family, friends, and country on the statue or monument.
>> If my city has decided to build a statue or monument to honor a famous person in my country, the person I would choose would be Park Geun Hye who is the incumbent president of South Korea. I would choose her because she has opened the eyes of the Korean people, myself included, of the effect of being indifferent towards politics; the effect being a major crisis in the country. To prevent history from repeating itself, I would choose to have a monument of Park Geun Hye built where her misdeeds are recorded. Additionally, there would be a reminder that we, as a people, should be mindful of current politics.

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