2017/02/03 Homework

2017-02-06 · 첨삭 강사 Charlie

학생이 쓴 원문

I would be able to believe that the best things to stay in healthy is a mind control for a state of balance. I have had a quite busy days in my work life these days because there is a quite high responsibility and there are many work I have been experienced. In this situation, I feel a heavy pressure that I have to make a good performance. As the result of this, I have realized that a state of balance is very important for a work life including a personal life because if works don’t go well, it affect badly on a personal life.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! ^^


I hope you had a good class with Teacher Dianne the other day. ^^ Thank you for answering the composition topic she gave.


All good things,

==Teacher Charlie==


I would be able to believe that the best things to stay in healthy is a mind control for a state of balance. I have had a quite busy days in my work life these days because there is a quite high responsibility and there are many work I have been experienced. In this situation, I feel a heavy pressure that I have to make a good performance. As the result of this, I have realized that a state of balance is very important for a work life including a personal life because if works don’t go well, it affect badly on a personal life.

>> The best thing to do to stay healthy in my opinion is to have balance in one\'s  life. I say this because recently I have had busy days at work where it takes all of me to complete my tasks. I really feel pressured to give my best. Having experience this, I have realized that having balance between work and play is important because if one outweighs the other, for example work, it will negatively affect your personal life.

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