2017/03/03 Homework

Hello [이름]! ^^

A wonderful afternoon^^

Thank you for accomplishing your assignment.

I appreciate you sharing your opinions and I would agree with you.

Young people should prioritize studies first.

Nowadays, education is expensive however, ignorance is more expensive.

I think this is the reason why a lot of students still pursue their studies despite financial struggles.

See you in class^^

Teacher Glenda

Here are my corrections:

I think it is a good idea that teenagers have jobs while they are still student.

>> Correct

First of all, it is definitely a good chance to know how difficult to earn a money and their parents scarifies for them.

>> First of all, it is definitely a good chance for them to know how difficult it is to earn money and how big are their parents sacrifices for them.

Also, having a job is crucial for some students having a financial adversity to continue studying.

>> Correct

or

>> Having a job is also crucial for students who are having financial difficulties in continuing their studies.

However, the first priority of student is study, not having a job.

>> However, the first priority of students is to study not having a job.