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2017-07-13 · 첨삭 강사 ali

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I don’t believe there is another life after the real life and it is over after the real life. I think an afterlife was made by curiosity and fear about after death. Then, many kinds of religion and mythology matched and covered these emotional things to satisfy people with their desires. However, it is valuable for some people to believe afterlife because some people feel relieved from the fear of death and they would drive their life well to be a good place such as a heaven after death.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^^

Thank you for sharing your thoughts about this topic.
It\'s very important to respect other people\'s belief.
Some may not believe of such and some believe and look forward to the after life.
But we can just respect both because we cannot instill what we believe in to other people. :)
Thumbs up! ;D

Teacher Glenda

I don’t believe there is another life after the real life and it is over after the real life.
>> I don’t believe that there is another life after the real life and it is over after the real life.
I think an afterlife was made by curiosity and fear about after death.
>> Correct
Then, many kinds of religion and mythology matched and covered these emotional things to satisfy people with their desires.
>>Correct
However, it is valuable for some people to believe afterlife because some people feel relieved from the fear of death and they would drive their life well to be in a good place such as a heaven after death.
>> Correct

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