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2018-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 Grace

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I usually paly online games and working out in my free time. When I play online games in my free time I cannot notify how fast time flies. By the time I stop the game the time usually is after 1 ~ 2 hour. And then I usually work out. When I work out I feel that time flows much slower than playing the games. However, I feel more rewarding than when I play the games though.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]:)
I hope that did you enjoy our class earlier.
Please enjoy your weekend and see you on Monday:)

I usually paly online games and working out in my free time.
>> I usually play online games and working out during my free time.

When I play online games in my free time I cannot notify how fast time flies.
>> When I play online games in my free time, I didn\'t know that the time is so fast.

By the time I stop the game the time usually is after 1 ~ 2 hour.
>> By the time that I stop playing it ends after an hour or 2.

And then I usually work out.
>> After playing online game, I like working out or go to the gym and do some exercising.

When I work out I feel that time flows much slower than playing the games.
>> When I work out I think the time is so slow rather playing online games.

However, I feel more rewarding than when I play the games though.
>> However, I feel more satisfied every time that I will play an online game.

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