2018. 11. 14

2018-11-16 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi Gina, finally it's Friday! See you soon! Well, There is nothing famous in Gimhae where I live now, but the Busan, near the Gimhae have a lot of famous things. There are a world-scale fire work festival and the BIFF, Busan International Film Festival in every Octobor. There is famous for beautiful sea, so most of visitors almost always visit the aquarium, the fish market that is the most famous in Korea and beaches such as Haeundae, Gwangalli and Songjeong. It is always crowded and active.

강사 첨삭

Oh, yes! Happy Friday Su [이름]!

See you later! ^^

~Teacher Gina

Well, There is nothing famous in Gimhae where I live now, but the Busan, near the Gimhae have a lot of famous things. There are a world-scale fire work festival and the BIFF, Busan International Film Festival in every Octobor. There is famous for beautiful sea, so most of visitors almost always visit the aquarium, the fish market that is the most famous in Korea and beaches such as Haeundae, Gwangalli and Songjeong. It is always crowded and active.

>> Well, there\'s nothing famous here on where I live now which is Gimhae. However, Busan, which is near Gimhae has a lot of famous things to offer. There is the world-scale fire work festival and the BIFF, Busan International Film Festival every October. It\'s also famous for its beautiful sea, so most visitors almost always visit the aquarium, the fish market which is the most famous in Korea, and the beaches such as Heundae, Gwangalli and Songjeong. It is always crowded and active.

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