2018.11.29
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi Su [이름]!
Thank you for this! I also think that letting a child enjoy his or her childhood would be more beneficial for him or her.
~Teacher Gina
I haven\'t consider to this way but I think that\'s a very good idea. Many parents are try to immerse their children in study even if they are only in preschool period or elementary school students. I think the early education doesn\'t work at their good university and job and it even just offer them lots of stress. So it would rather be better to take clean air, see the good things more and just run on the grass without any stress and work. If they grown up in this environment, both of their mind and body will be healthier and it will be a great assets when they start to study or have jobs.
>> I haven\'t considered this but I think that\'s a very good idea. Many parents try to immerse their children to studying even if they are only in preschool or elementary. I think that early education doesn\'t work to get them into a good university and job, and it even just offers them lots of stress. So it would be better to take in clean air, see the good things more and just run on the grass without stress and work. If they grow in this environment, both of their minds and bodies will be healthier and it will be great assets when they start to study or have jobs.
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