2018.11.30

2018-12-03 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

Oh, I just thought about that. Keeping the tradition is very important in these time, fast world. The traditional cultures are an identity and strength of a country so there are many quarrels and steals such as Japan to make their culture colorful. It needs to com[이름]e the citizen to keep our tradition. In my case, I can keep the Korean culture to wear the Hanbok, Korean traditional uniform, in holidays, spread the correct Korean cultures using the SNS, argue and fight with Japan to rectify the wrong insistence and fabrications. It will be work at other countries.

강사 첨삭

Good evening, Su [이름]!


I also agree that we should never forget our traditions. We should work hard to keep them alive.


~Teacher Gina



Oh, I just thought about that. Keeping the tradition is very important in these time, fast world. The traditional cultures are an identity and strength of a country so there are many quarrels and steals such as Japan to make their culture colorful. It needs to com[이름]e the citizen to keep our tradition. In my case, I can keep the Korean culture to wear the Hanbok, Korean traditional uniform, in holidays, spread the correct Korean cultures using the SNS, argue and fight with Japan to rectify the wrong insistence and fabrications. It will be work at other countries.


>> Oh, I just thought about that. Keeping the tradition is very important these days in our fast world. The traditional culture is the identity and strength of  a county. That is why there are a lot of quarrels and stealing that happened such as what Japan did to make their culture colorful. The cooperation of each citizen is needed to keep our tradition. In my case, I can keep the Korean culture by wearing hanbok, Korean traditional uniform, during holidays. I also spread the correct Korean cultures using the SNS, and argue and fight with Japan to rectify their wrong insistence and fabrications. It will also work for other countries.

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