2018.12.03
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good Evening, Su [이름]!
Thank you for submitting your homework tonight. I appreciate it. ^^ I agree that it\'s great if the government can make health policies that will make what we currently have better. But as you said, it seems like they are more focused on other things or issues so we should try our best to take care of ourselves rather than expecting our government for it.
~Teacher Gina
The prevention is always better than resolve. Of course it will be the best country if the goverment serves some health-welfare to prevent the health problems and improve my health, but practically it\'s the best pollicy if they could made good condition of treatment and medication for now. Because it\'s the basic of nation to ensure the safe and best condition to heal disease but it\'s not good enough yet and there are not enough money to prevention and maybe they are busy to solve the problems close at hand. So I think I should better to improve my health myself instead of expect to the goverment just for now.
>> Prevention is always better than resolving. Of course, it will be the best for the country if the government serves some health-welfare to prevent health problems and to improve my health. But practically, it would be the best policy if they could make good treatment process and medication for now. It is one of the basic duties for the nation- to ensure the safety and condition of the people, to heal them from diseases. But it\'s not good enough yet and there\'s no enough money for prevention and maybe they are busy in solving the problems that are close at hand. So I think I should improve my health myself for now instead of expecting the government for it.
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