2018.12.05
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello, Su [이름]!
Good evening!
Thank you for sharing your thought about the question that I gave you. I appreciate your answer and I\'m grateful since I learned new things today from the health risk factors you mentioned. ^^
Anyway, see you later!
~Teacher Gina
If they never have children, they can\'t get a their other self and can\'t feel happy from growing child so maybe they will feel lonely as getting older. However I know the advantages more than disasvantages. If they don\'t have their kids, they can gather lots of money and it will be great assets for their life. They don\'t need to worry about many problems with their partner, they only have to go travel when the free time. When a woman be pregnant and giving birth, her rectus abdominal muscle and perineal are ruptured. She also can get postpartum depression and another many illnesses. It takes 2-3 years to given back her health but it can\'t be like the original even after 3 years. So they can enjoy their whole life and don\'t need to break her health, I supposed.
>> If they will never have children, they will never find their other self and they will never feel the happiness of growing a child. So maybe, they will feel lonely as they get older. However, I know more advantages than disadvantages. If they don\'t have kids, they can gather lots of money and it will be great assets for their life. They don\'t need to worry about many problems with their partner, they only have to go travel during their free time. When a woman is pregnant and is giving birth, her rectus abdominal muscle and perinea are ruptured. She can also get postpartum depression and many other illnesses. It takes 2-3 years for her to regain her health but it\'s not going to be the same as before even after 3 years. So I suppose, they can enjoy their life and they don\'t need to put their health at risk if they will not be having a child.
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