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2018-12-18 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

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Hi, Gina! I remember that we talked about this topic in our class. I love the online shopping service when I get clothes. I haven't experienced it but there are even online food markets such as fish, vegetables, meats and cooked meals. It's amazing progress in individual side. But I'm worried about small markets. As people buy things all, small and medium sized businesses and local markets will disappeared. There are so many small local markets worked by local people so a lot of jobs will be fade away as the online markets be great.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Su [이름]! Yes, we also talked about this last time. I\'m glad that you remembered. ^^

We talked about how convenient it is but I\'m also thankful that on this homework, we get to think about its consequences. I agree with you that the small markets might close down if there will be no customers because most of them do online shopping. I just hope that as the online shopping platform flourishes, people will still consider purchasing stuff they need from their local markets so that there will be a balance.


~Teacher Gina


 I love the online shopping service when I get clothes. I haven\'t experienced it but there are even online food markets such as fish, vegetables, meats and cooked meals. It\'s amazing progress in individual side. But I\'m worried about small markets. As people buy things all, small and medium sized businesses and local markets will disappeared. There are so many small local markets worked by local people so a lot of jobs will be fade away as the online markets be great.


>> I love the online shopping service when I get clothes. I haven\'t experienced it but there are even online food markets such as fish, vegetables, meats and cooked meals. It\'s an amazing progress in an individual side. But I\'m worried about the small markets. As people buy all the things they need online, small and medium sized businesses and local markets will disappear. There are many small local markets where local people work at. So a lot of jobs might be gone as the online markets flourish.

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