2018.12.13
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good evening, Su [이름]!
I agree that things like what you mentioned matters whenever we choose to work, no matter what our career is. ^^
~Teacher Gina
There are three levels for hospital, the first is biggest and greatest level such as an university hospital and the third one is the smallest one such as a clinic. And I prefer to work for a first leveled hospital. I suppose to I will be able to provide better medical service and nursing with the high-tech instrument and well organized system in the better environment. I also will be offered better well-fare. People tend to recognize someone\'s career in big hospital more greatly than the small one. So it will contribute greatly when I try to move my workplace.
>> There are two classifications for a hospital. The first one is the biggest and the greatest level such as a university hospital. The second one is the smallest such as a clinic. And I prefer to work in a first class or first level hospital. I suppose that I will be able to provide better medical service and nursing with the high-tech instrument and well organized system in a better environment. I will also be offered with better well-fare. People tend to receive greater recognition over someone\'s career when they work in a big hospital than a small one. So this will contribute greatly when I try to move to my workplace.
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