2018.12.19

2019-01-16 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

I think it is a bad thing to become famous at young age. There are many important things what we can do only when we were young. But if they become so famous that get too much attentions, they lose a lot of precious things even they haven\'t ever experienced it once. And children don\'t have mature think and mind. They can\'t endure fingers of people and rumours so it can hurt them. In my opinion, children should be just children.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Su [이름]!


Thank you for submitting this to me and for sharing your opinion. ^^


~Teacher Gina



I think it is a bad thing to become famous at young age. There are many important things what we can do only when we were young. But if they become so famous that get too much attentions, they lose a lot of precious things even they haven\'t ever experienced it once. And children don\'t have mature think and mind. They can\'t endure fingers of people and rumours so it can hurt them. In my opinion, children should be just children.


>> I think it is a bad thing to become famous at a young age. There are so many important things that we can only do when we are young. But if they become so famous, they too much attention from others and they lose a lot of precious things that they wouldn\'t be able to experience even once. And children don\'t have a mature thinking and mind. They can\'t endure the fingers of people that points at them and rumors can hurt them. In my opinion, children should be just children.

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