2018.12.27
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon, Su [이름]!
Thank you for this!
Well, I totally agree that having team sports is much better since it also helps us to become more social to others. However, just like you, I also prefer playing games alone or with few people. ^^
~Teacher Gina
I agree with the first one more. We can improve relationship with other people when we\'re doing sports such as football or team game. We can make new friends, laugh together and improve teamwork and it\'s especially important to children. For instance, there are general team sports programs in all the schools and several companies. However honestly, I like to enjoy sports alone or just two to four people such as tennis, clim[이름]g and swimming. It\'s benefit is to focus on just the game and myself.
>> I agree with the first one more. We can improve our relationship with other people when we\'re doing sports such as football or other team games. We can make new friends, laugh together and improve our teamwork and it\'s especially important to children. For instance, there are general team sports programs in all the schools and several companies. However, honestly, I like to enjoy playing sports alone or with just two to four people such as tennis, clim[이름]g and swimming. It\'s benefit is just for me to focus on the game and myself.
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