20180704 homework

Hi David! Thanks for doing your first homework. I can say that you have the potential to become a writer.

You can express your thoughts through writing. However, I corrected all your sentences. So since your

homework is a writing task, I need to check if you have used correct grammar, punctuations, spelling,

and proper capitalization. Please check it out. Your errors are not serious so that\'s another good point.

Also, I couldn\'t understand your last sentence so I wasn\'t able to correct. it Tell me about it tomorrow. ^^

~~Teacher May~~

In korea, from 20 they have rights to vote, drink, smoke etc.

>> In Korea, people start to have the right to vote, drink, and smoke at the age of 20.

Nowadays many politician are insisting adolescents rights for vote.

>> Nowadays, many politicians want to give the adolescents the right to vote. 

They say \" adolescent should fight and vote for their rights also, if they don\'t vote then who will gonna gaurantee their rights.\"

>> They say, \"Adolescents should also fight for their rights. If they don\'t vote, then who will gaurantee their rights?\"

so they want to lower the age limits which don\'t allow adolescent to vote.

>> So, they want to lower the age limits and adolescents are not allowed to vote.

But i don\'t agree about lower the available age of vote, because at the age of that time they are preparing for their future and get ready for the test such as SAT.

>> I don\'t agree about this because adolescents take their time preparing for their future. They are preparing to the tests such as SAT.

But if they get chance to vote, they have to use their time to search and decide which one they pick.

>> But if they get a chance to vote, they have to use their time wisely to search and decide who\'s best for them.

It\'s not that simple and needs a lot of interests to politics.

>> It\'s not that simple and it doesn\'t need to make them more interested in politics.

I agree that some portion of young students are speaially inerested in politics.

>> I know that there are some young students who are interested in politics.

Also i think they deserve rights for vote but if we lower the age limists the other portion; i think the other portion of students is more bigger so that\'s my second reason that i disagree about giving them rights for vote.

>> Also, I think they deserve to have a right to vote.