20180709 Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good afternoon David! Thanks for doing your homework. I appreciate your answers.
It seems like you really are aware of everything that is happening around you.
I hope that you are always safe. ^^
~~May~~
First, you should lock the door well. Because we don\'t know when thieves visit our home..
>> First, you should lock the door well and properly because we don\'t know when the thieves go to our house.
Also you should check the door and wall before get into home, If there are some checks or not.
>> Also, you should check the doors and the walls.
In korea ther was a case that thieves keep waching on the several house, leave marks near their house and after that they robbed theese empty houses.
>> In Korea, there was an incident happened when thieves kept an eye to several houses, left marks near the houses, and robbed the house when nobody was around inside.
Some while later about this case media reported that they checked the certain house which look like vacant and robbed there. So we have to check the marks near our front door.
>> The media reported that the houses are empty and no one lives there and they tried to rob. So, it is important for us to check our main doors.
Think differentle without any cirme, we also can be dangerous becasue of our mistakes in home.
>> We have to be careful even without criminals around, because we can also be involved in an accidents at home.
we should check the gas valve before leaving. we should keep wathcing on the pots or ohter things which is on the fire.
>> We should also check the gas valve before leaving the house. We should keep checking the pots and other things that could cause fire.
Also slippy toilet could be dangerous for especially for child and old man.
>> Also, slippery toilets can also be dangerous especially for children and old people.
Conclusively we look into two other ways to make our home safe.protect from the ousides danger and inside dange.
>> In conclusion, we must think on alternative ways to keep our inside and outside of our house safe to live in.
we should keep in mind several things and put into action. These make you safer.
>> We should think of many things and make an action. These things make you safe.
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