2019. 01. 24

2019-01-29 · 첨삭 강사 Gina

학생이 쓴 원문

They have two different benefits. Regular exercise makes my heart stronger and brings well balanced muscles. It is important for living long and preventing getting older. However balanced diet can fill up our essential nutrient and can prevent obesity, low weight, diseases of digeststive system, illnesses from innutrition and even cancers. So I will pick the second one if I have to choose just one between these two things. But as you know, the most important and wise choice is the balance of two. And it\'s also the hardest practice.

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon, Su [이름]!


Thank you for sharing your opinion about the question I sent last time. ^^


~Teacher Gina



They have two different benefits. Regular exercise makes my heart stronger and brings well balanced muscles. It is important for living long and preventing getting older. However balanced diet can fill up our essential nutrient and can prevent obesity, low weight, diseases of digeststive system, illnesses from innutrition and even cancers. So I will pick the second one if I have to choose just one between these two things. But as you know, the most important and wise choice is the balance of two. And it\'s also the hardest practice.


>> They have two different benefits. Regular exercise makes my heart stronger and brings well balanced muscles. It is important for living long and preventing getting older. However balanced diet can fill up the essential nutrients our body needs and can prevent obesity, malnutrition, diseases in the digestive system and even cancers. So I will pick the second one if I have to choose just one between these two things. But as you know, the most important and wisest choice is to balance both. And it\'s also the hardest practice.

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