2019. 02. 12 Exploiting animals
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Good evening, Su [이름]!
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I agree that we should not exploit others and be greedy for our needs.
It\'s just right for us to protect animals and other resources from nature. ^^
~Teacher Gina
That is a hot issue as vegetarianism is rising up these days. I couldn\'t set my thoughts perfectly yet but the clearest thing is that we all don\'t have any rights to use animals for our convenience such as cosmetic, clothes like a fur coat and a bag from crocodile\'s leather, toy, science study and meat. We are compelled to eat other animals because we can\'t make nutrients ourselves like plants and it\'s necessary as a kind of animal. However it doesn\'t mean that we can kill and exploit others. We should get just minimal things without giving them too much pains unnecessarily. We have to live together with animals in the nature and should protect them as nature destroyers or most powerful species in the food chain.
>> That is a hot issue as vegetarianism is rising up these days. I couldn\'t set my thoughts perfectly yet but the clearest thing is that we all don\'t have any rights to use animals for our convenience such as for cosmetics, clothes like a fur coat and a bag from crocodile\'s leather, toy, science study and meat. We are compelled to eat other animals because we can\'t make nutrients ourselves like plants and it\'s necessary for us. However it doesn\'t mean that we can kill and exploit others. We should get just the minimal things without giving them too much unnecessary pains. We have to live together with animals in nature and should protect them from nature destroyers or from the most powerful species in the food chain.
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