2020.03.18 Homework

2020-03-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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I want to be a teacher, however, I always have agonized the way that makes me the one and only teacher. Since we are now on the 4th industrial revolution, I want to be an expert in educational technology. Now that I have handled a computer since the early years, I will begin with research about effective learning methods by using a computer. Especially, I will study the brain area that is invigorated when students study and make some educational programs to stimulate that part easily. Also, I want to make a program that fits every student\'s career plan. There are so many tests such as career aptitude tests. Students can notice their aptitude and inclination by reading result, however, there are not many real programs that can help them check if the result was right. If there is a VR program that can experience lots of jobs and psychology games that shows a participant\'s personality, it will be more helpful to teenagers who have trouble with deciding their career path.

강사 첨삭

WOW! Nice thoughts you have given here. Admirable Jenny!  ^^
-Teacher Jedah

I want to be a teacher, however, I always have agonized the way that makes me the one and only teacher. 
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Since we are now on the 4th industrial revolution, I want to be an expert in educational technology. 
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Now that I have handled a computer since the early years, I will begin with research about effective learning methods by using a computer. 
>>Since I am adept to using the computer since my early childhood, I would like to use this tool in finding out more about the effective learning methods.
Especially, I will study the brain area that is invigorated when students study and make some educational programs to stimulate that part easily. 
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Also, I want to make a program that fits every student\'s career plan. 
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There are so many tests such as career aptitude tests. 
>>CORRECT
Students can notice their aptitude and inclination by reading result, however, there are not many real programs that can help them check if the result was right. 
>>CORRECT
If there is a VR program that can experience lots of jobs and psychology games that shows a participant\'s personality, it will be more helpful to teenagers who have trouble with deciding their career path.
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