[2022.07.20_H.W] What do you like best about your culture?
학생이 쓴 원문
There are other cultures in Korea, but I think K-pop is the best in my culture. First, because being made by many artist, K-pop has various theme in every situation. For example, I need to feel confidence I can listen to powerful songs. And, k-pop can trigger the interest to other countries\' people, so they can feel curious about Korean. I knew that Bang-Tan which is boy group of 5 members in Korea have become famous all around the word, and this has a positive impact on knowing the Korea abroad. In conclusion, K-pop of Korean culture is the best at a variety of theme to listen and a way to introducing our culture.
강사 첨삭
Good day, Ye Kyeom!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. CamilleThere are other cultures in Korea, but I think K-pop is the best in my culture.
>> CORRECT!
First, because being made by many artist, K-pop has various theme in every situation.
>> First, being made by many artists, K-pop has various themes in every situation.
For example, I need to feel confidence I can listen to powerful songs.
>> CORRECT!
And, k-pop can trigger the interest to other countries\' people, so they can feel curious about Korean.
>> And, K-pop can trigger the interest of other countries\' people, so they can feel curious about the Korean culture.
I knew that Bang-Tan which is boy group of 5 members in Korea have become famous all around the word, and this has a positive impact on knowing the Korea abroad.
>> I knew that Bang-Tan which is boy group of 7 members in Korea have become famous all around the word, and this has a positive impact abroad on knowing about Korea .
In conclusion, K-pop of Korean culture is the best at a variety of theme to listen and a way to introducing our culture.
>> In conclusion, K-pop of Korean culture is the best at a variety of theme to listen and a way to introduce our culture.
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