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2023-07-19 · 첨삭 강사 Camille

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The lifestyle of army is regular and strict. It is nessasary to protect the nation. But I don\'t like that style. Because I want to live freely. The korean army have had bad tradition such as violence and low qualities of food, compensation etc... But It is improving recently. I hope that people admire soldiers. Thanks for them, we can live safely.

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Good day, [이름]!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

The lifestyle of army is regular and strict.

>> The lifestyle in the army is regular and strict.

It is nessasary to protect the nation.

>> It is necessary to protect the nation.

But I don\'t like that style.

>> CORRECT!

Because I want to live freely.

>> It is because I want to live freely.

The korean army have had bad tradition such as violence and low qualities of food, compensation etc... But It is improving recently.

>> The Korean army have had a bad tradition such as violence and low qualities of food, compensation, and others, but it is improving recently.

I hope that people admire soldiers.

>> CORRECT!

Thanks for them, we can live safely.

>> Thanks to them, we can live safely.

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