20th March

2018-03-26 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Hi Teacher Shanee^^ I'm Spring . Did you have a good weekend? Its quote below souds like pushing the aspires. QUOTE FOR THE DAY: “Learn how to be happy with what you have while you pursue all that you want.”~Jim rohn HOMEWORK: Composition writing! In not more than ten sentences, write about a time when you felt proud of yourself. When having felt proud of myself is that I heard that my sister said to her friends about me. She praised me to her friend on the phone at her room. I could got her voice at the front of the door at that time. I've never forgot that day. Since then I've seen my sister more differently. Also, sometimes I used to fight with her, I could remember that day. I didn't do fighting with her. Here's my writing. I'm looking forward to your resposes.

강사 첨삭

Hello SPRING!

Thanks for sharing this to me.

I made the necessary corrections below.

Please review them.

See you tomorrow.

~Teacher Shanee^^,


Hi Teacher Shanee^^ I\'m Spring .
Did you have a good weekend?
Its quote below souds like pushing the aspires. 

>>>  The quote below sounds motivating and inspiring.

QUOTE FOR THE DAY:
“Learn how to be happy with what you have while you pursue all that you want.”~Jim rohn

HOMEWORK:
Composition writing!
In not more than ten sentences, write about a time when you felt proud of yourself.

When having felt proud of myself is that I heard that my sister said to her friends about me. 

>>> The moment I felt proud of myself was when I heard my sister talking about me with her friends.
 She praised me to her friend on the phone at her room. 

>>> OR: She talked highly about me when she was talking with her friend on the phone in her room.
 I could got her voice at the front of the door at that time. 

>>>  I could hear her voice at the front of her door at that time.
 I\'ve never forgot that day. 

>>> I have never forgotten that day.
 Since then I\'ve seen my sister more differently.

>>>  Correct!
 Also, sometimes I used to fight with her, I could remember that day. 

>>> Also, when I sometimes fight with her, I remember that day.       
 I didn\'t do fighting with her. 

>>> Because of that I avoid fighting with her. 


 Here\'s my writing.
I\'m looking forward to your resposes.

>>> I\'m looking forward to your feedback.

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