22nd March

2018-03-26 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Teacher Shanee^^, QUOTE FOR THE DAY: "Quietly endure, silently suffer and patiently wait."~Martin Luther King, Jr. HOMEWORK: Composition writing! In not more than ten sentences, write an essay about the movie that inspired you. The memorable movie that have ever inspired me is that "Remember me" I watched the movie lately. The impressed part of that is that protagonist who wanted to be a singer playing the guitar went to the heaven looking for the popular singer passed away. He ended up meeting the singer and dreamed of being singer. Even though his family obstructed him, he did what he like to do. Autully I think I would lack of that personality he has such as persistence. But I'll be able to overcome my vulnerable characteristic and then I have persistence. Especially, When teaching for some students I need to inspire them persistently.

강사 첨삭

Go for it SPRING!

Thanks for writing this!

~Teacher Shanee^^,


Teacher Shanee^^,

QUOTE FOR THE DAY:
\"Quietly endure, silently suffer and patiently wait.\"~Martin Luther King, Jr.

HOMEWORK:
Composition writing!
In not more than ten sentences, write an essay about the movie that inspired you.

The memorable movie that have ever inspired me is that \"Remember me\" 

>>> The memorable movie that has inspired me is \"Remember Me.\"
 I watched the movie lately. 

>>> Correct!
 The impressed part of that is that protagonist who wanted to be a singer playing the guitar went to the heaven looking for the popular singer passed away. 

>>> The impressive part of that movie is when the protagonist who wanted to be a singer who plays a guitar went to heaven to look for a popular singer who passed away.
 He ended up meeting the singer and dreamed of being singer. 

>>> Correct!
 Even though his family obstructed him, he did what he like to do.

>>> Even though his family obstructed him / opposed his decision, he did what he likes to do.
 Autully I think I would lack of that personality he has such as persistence. 

>>> Actually, I think I lack persistence unlike the protagonist.  
 But I\'ll be able to overcome my vulnerable characteristic and then I have persistence.

>>> But I am sure that I have the will to overcome my vulnerable characteristic and develop persistence.

Especially, When teaching for some students I need to inspire them persistently.

>>> I really need it because when I am teaching some students, I need to inspire them persistently.

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