23th home work

2014-10-24 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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Hello, I'm sorry I'm late. ESSAY: What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important. I think a good supervisor must have discernment and leadership. He or she will need many good supporters to lead the company. So he or she has to find a proper person who will help to them. With powerful leadership, he or she will listen their helpers and makes some good differences. That's why I think so.

강사 첨삭

Hello Diana!!!

Nice job!!!
I appreciate you doing good with your homework. 

Keep on reading! Keep on practicing! 
Have a great evening ahead. 
Teacher Jeny ^_^
 

Hello,

>>correct
I\'m sorry I\'m late.

>>I\'m sorry, I\'m late.

ESSAY:
What are some important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)? Use specific details and examples to explain why these qualities are important.

I think a good supervisor must have discernment and leadership.

>>correct

He or she will need many good supporters to lead the company.

>>correct

So he or she has to find a proper person who will help to them.

>>So, he or she has to find a proper person who will help him.

With powerful leadership, he or she will listen their helpers and makes some good differences.

>>With powerful leadership, he or she will listen to their employees and will make a difference.

That\'s why I think so.

>>That\'s my opinion.

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