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2018-11-26 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

학생이 쓴 원문

My first phone was just a phone. It could make a phone calls and send text messages, but that was it. However, phones have changed a lot over the years. They have become a lot better in quality than in the pasrt. I can surf the internet on my phone now. Having a smartphone makes a world of difference. Many young people are addicted to their phone. They can not put them down. So they can not develop face-to-face communication skills. Many old people are concerned about this problem.

강사 첨삭

My first phone was just a phone.

>> Correct
It could make a phone calls and send text messages, but that was it.

>> It could make a phone calls and send text messages, but that was it.
However, phones have changed a lot over the years.

>> Correct
They have become a lot better in quality than in the past.

>> Correct
I can surf the internet on my phone now.

>> Correct
Having a smartphone makes a world of difference.

>> Correct

Many young people are addicted to their phone.

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They can not put them down.

>> Correct
So they can not develop face-to-face communication skills.

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Many old people are concerned about this problem.

>> Correct

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