25Oct2024_home work
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
Writing task: How much time do you spend outdoors every week?
answer :
As you know I am introvert so I spend most of time at home.
But I tring to outdoors playing for my daughter.
I guess outdoors playing is good for kids.
I think I spent outdoors about an hour everyday and we were spent outdoors usually for 4hours a weekend.
I am almost at the playground on weekdays, and I\'m almost at the mart on weekends and I\'m lookng at the shopping mall and playing with my kid
강사 첨삭
Hello, Ms. [Name]! I think, quality time, may it be outdoors or indoors is important for kids. People say it is crucial for their emotional and mental well-being and makes a strong and everlasting bond with you and your kids.
-T. Sonny
As you know I am introvert so I spend most of time at home.
>>As you know, I am an introvert so I spend most of my time at home.
But I tring to outdoors playing for my daughter.
But I tring to outdoors playing for my daughter.
>>But, I try to go outdoors to play with my daughter.
I guess outdoors playing is good for kids.
>>I guess, playing outdoors is good for kids.
I think I spent outdoors about an hour everyday and we were spent outdoors usually for 4hours a weekend.
>>I think, I spend about an hour outdoors every day and usually for 4 hours every weekend.
I am almost at the playground on weekdays, and I\'m almost at the mart on weekends and I\'m lookng at the shopping mall and playing with my kid.
I guess outdoors playing is good for kids.
>>I guess, playing outdoors is good for kids.
I think I spent outdoors about an hour everyday and we were spent outdoors usually for 4hours a weekend.
>>I think, I spend about an hour outdoors every day and usually for 4 hours every weekend.
I am almost at the playground on weekdays, and I\'m almost at the mart on weekends and I\'m lookng at the shopping mall and playing with my kid.
>>Most of the time, I\'m at the playground on weekdays while on weekends, I\'m at the mart or supermarket window shopping and playing with my kid.
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