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2019-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Matt

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When i finished my work and was going to home, i thought i could watch the tv show which started at 7:30(and at that time, it was 7:00). However as soon as i arrived at home, i foud out i was in big trouble. my digital door lock was out of juice so i was\'nt able to get inside. I was paniced and started googling to find a way. At last google bailed me out. All i needed was a 9v battery. I ran to the convinient store and got it. Finally i made it. i could get inside my house. But it was over 8:00, I couldn\'t do anything but ditched my plan which was watching the tv show.

강사 첨삭

Hi, Cho! Thank you for sending in your composition. It was a pleasure helping you out. Please don\'t hesitate to send me more so I can check them for you. I feel you. To have things that does not go the way as planned is frustrating. However, we have to think positive and make the best out of the things that are possible. Have a great day ahead.
-T.Matt
When i finished my work and was going to home, i thought i could watch the tv show which started at 7:30(and at that time, it was 7:00).
>>When I was on my way home from work, I thought I could watch a TV show that started at 7:30, however, at that time, it was already 7:00.
However as soon as i arrived at home, i foud out i was in big trouble. my digital door lock was out of juice so i was\'nt able to get inside.
>>As soon as I arrived home, I found out that I was in big trouble. My digital door lock was out of juice so I was not able to go inside.
I was paniced and started googling to find a way.
>>I was panicking and I started using Google to find a way to unlock the door.
>>In a moment\'s panic, I started using Google to find a way to unlock the door.

At last google bailed me out.

>>At last, Google bailed me out!

>>Finally,I was able to find a way in!

All i needed was a 9v battery.

>>All I needed was a 9v battery.

I ran to the convinient store and got it.

>>I ran to the convenience store and got one.

Finally i made it.

>>Finally, I made it.

>>I finally made it.

i could get inside my house.
>>I could get inside my house.

>>I was able to get in.

But it was over 8:00, I couldn\'t do anything but ditched my plan which was watching the tv show.

>>However, it was already past 8:00. I couldn\'t do anything but ditch my plan to watch the TV show.

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