27th July-1
학생이 쓴 원문
We talked about 'the education system'.
I think that all kinds of the educational system have their own advantages and disadvantages.
In case of our country, we focuses on classify students out of points which they take a test and then get.
The higher level students can choose the university which they want to enter.
The lower level students cant enter the university and they have to choose the job something like using the labor.
The main problem is this "we just choose the career or job according to our level"
Eventhough someone want to be a designer, he must go to the law school or the medicine school because his record is the highest level.
That is our country reality. Of course, it's not wrong totally. Most of people want to be a professional worker like as a lawyer or a doctor.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Oh, I never thought it would be that complicated in your country. Well, we also have entrance exams in our Universities it뭩 just that when we have a higher score we get to choose any major we like related to what we want but if we get a low score we still have chances of getting in to the university but with limited majors. Thank you for explaining more about the educational system in your country. I really appreciate it. See you tomorrow!
T.Faye
Here are some of the corrections:
We talked about 'the education system'.
>>We talked about the educational system of Korea.I think that all kinds of the educational system have their own advantages and disadvantages.
>>Correct!In case of our country, we focuses on classify students out of points which they take a test and then get.
>>In our country, we focus on classifying students with the points/average they get from the test.The higher level students can choose the university which they want to enter.
>>The higher the score a student gets, the higher chances that they choose a better major they want in the University.The lower level students cant enter the university and they have to choose the job something like using the labor.
>>If they get a low score, they can뭪 enter the University and should look for a job like labor.The main problem is this "we just choose the career or job according to our level"
>>Correct!Eventhough someone want to be a designer, he must go to the law school or the medicine school because his record is the highest level.
>>Eventhough, he or she wants to be a designer, he or she should go to law school or medicine school because his or her records show high level score.That is our country reality.
>>That is the reality in our country.
Of course, it's not wrong totally.
>>Of course it isn뭪 totally wrong.
Most of people want to be a professional worker like as a lawyer or a doctor.
>>Correct!
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