28th Feburary's homework

2018-02-28 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Some countries put a high tax on tobacco products to discourage smoking. Do you think this is fair to smokers? Answer in 5 sentences or more Although I can't smoke a cigarret,It's indespensible topic for most adults. In Korea, putting a high tax no tobacco products up to 5000 won or more. I think It is fair that raising the tax on tobacco. Because age for smoker is getting younger. For example students in high school start smoking. So putting high tax on tobacco is indispensible policy to discourage smoking. I'm looking forward to your response

강사 첨삭

Hi Spring!

Thank you for your composition.

Please take note of the suggestions below.

Have a great holiday!

~~ Teacher Sharon

Although I can\'t smoke a cigarret,It\'s indespensible topic for most adults.

>> Although I don\'t smoke, smoking is still a big issue among adults.
In Korea, putting a high tax no tobacco products up to 5000 won or more.

>> In Korea, the tax on tobacco products amounts to 5000 won or more.
I think It is fair that raising the tax on tobacco.

>> I think it\'s fair to raise the tax on tobacco products.

Because age for smoker is getting younger.

>> Smokers are getting younger and younger.

For example students in high school start smoking.

>> For example, high school students have already started smoking.
So putting high tax on tobacco is indispensible policy to discourage smoking.

>> That is why we have to impose high taxes on tobacco products to discourage smoking.

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