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Today\'s weather is cloudy. The cloud looks very heavy and the temperature is very low. Everyone I see on the street is wearing long padded coat. It is too cold that I can\'t withstand without a coat. The weather forecast says that It will be hotter soon. And I hope that, too.
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The best season for me is winter. I love this season the most because I don\'t need to worry about breathing. When summer begins, I perspire heavily, and feel lots of disgustednesses. I don\'t need to worry about it when winter appears, so I love that point. Furthermore, there are a wealth of activities in winter. skiing is my favorite. It is so fun.
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The current season in my country is winter. Most of times in this season, It is too cold to go outside. So nowadays I barely go outside. But the good point is we can see snowing. Snow makes our mind calm and relaxed. Furthermore, we can make our own snowman and make lots of fun from snow fighting. I enjoy current season because of these reasons
강사 첨삭
Hi Harry,
I admired your determination to learn and I could sense your determination to improve. Your great interest and diligence in learning conversational English are very commendable. I strongly encourage you to simply enjoy studying English and have no fear of making grammar slips. This attitude will help you improve in strides. ~ Teacher QUENNY..
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Today\'s weather is cloudy. The cloud looks very heavy and the temperature is very low.
>> Today\'s weather is cloudy. The cloud looks very heavy and the temperature is very low.
Everyone I see on the street is wearing long padded coat.
>> Everyone I see on the street is wearing a long padded coat.
It is too cold that I can\'t withstand without a coat.
>> It is too cold that I can\'t withstand without a coat.
The weather forecast says that It will be hotter soon. And I hope that, too.
>> The weather forecast says that the weather will be hotter soon. And I hope that, too.
30
The best season for me is winter. I love this season the most because I don\'t need to worry about breathing.
>> The best season for me is winter. I love this season the most because I don\'t need to worry about breathing.
When summer begins, I perspire heavily, and feel lots of disgustednesses.
>> When summer begins, I perspire heavily and feel lots of disgustingness.
I don\'t need to worry about it when winter appears, so I love that point.
>> I don\'t need to worry about it when winter appears, so I love that point.
Furthermore, there are a wealth of activities in winter. skiing is my favorite. It is so fun.
>> Furthermore, there are a wealth of activities in winter and skiing is my favorite winter sport because it is so fun.
31
The current season in my country is winter.
>>The current season in my country is winter.
Most of times in this season, It is too cold to go outside.
>> Most of the time in this season, it is too cold to go outside.
So nowadays I barely go outside. But the good point is we can see snowing.
>> So nowadays I barely go outside but the good point is we can see the snow.
Snow makes our mind calm and relaxed.
>> Snow makes our minds calm and relaxed.
Furthermore, we can make our own snowman and make lots of fun from snow fighting. I enjoy current season because of these reasons.
>> Furthermore, we can make our own snowman and make lots of fun from snow fighting. I enjoy the current season because of these reasons.
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29
Today\'s weather is cloudy. The cloud looks very heavy and the temperature is very low. Everyone I see on the street is wearing long padded coat. It is too cold that I can\'t withstand without a coat. The weather forecast says that It will be hotter soon. And I hope that, too.
30
The best season for me is winter. I love this season the most because I don\'t need to worry about breathing. When summer begins, I perspire heavily, and feel lots of disgustednesses. I don\'t need to worry about it when winter appears, so I love that point. Furthermore, there are a wealth of activities in winter. skiing is my favorite. It is so fun.
31
The current season in my country is winter. Most of times in this season, It is too cold to go outside. So nowadays I barely go outside. But the good point is we can see snowing. Snow makes our mind calm and relaxed. Furthermore, we can make our own snowman and make lots of fun from snow fighting. I enjoy current season because of these reasons
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