2nd essay

2019-08-29 · 첨삭 강사 Matt

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It is alway a matter of not missing the right timing to supress the fire. Countries in southern america which share amazon including brazil are seemed to missed it unfotunatlely. Most people are wreck about this disaster, and some people think this is not gratuitous but the government of brazil is being practical. Cuz they always want to develop economics by deleting amazon. As amazon produces over 20% of oxygen, lots of peole get feet cold and worry about influence of deforestation

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-T. Matt

It is alway a matter of not missing the right timing to supress the fire.

>>It is always a matter of not missing the right timing to suppress the fire.
Countries in southern america which share amazon including brazil are seemed to missed it unfotunatlely.

>>Unfortunately, countries in South America which share the Amazon, including Brazil, missed it.
Most people are wreck about this disaster, and some people think this is not gratuitous but the government of brazil is being practical.

>>Most people are in a wreck because of the disaster and some people think it is not being gratuitous,but, the government of Brazil is just being practical.

Cuz they always want to develop economics by deleting amazon.

>>Because they always want to develop the country\'s economics by getting rid of the Amazon.
As amazon produces over 20% of oxygen, lots of peole get feet cold and worry about influence of deforestation

>>The Amazon produces over 20% of oxygen an a lot of people get cold feet and worry about the effects of deforestation.

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