2nd homework
학생이 쓴 원문
HOMEWORK:
[ESSAY]
How can proper greetings help improve relationships with other people?
>> Proper greetings can improve relationships with other people, of course.
When we meet who are strangers. If I say greeting with kindness to them, we are become a familiar relations each other.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Ho!
Great job explaining why greetings are important! I like that you connected greetings with building relationships. Next time, you could add an example of a kind greeting you like to make your writing even clearer. Keep up the good work!
~Teacher Polly
>>CORRECT
When we meet who are strangers. If I say greeting with kindness to them, we are become a familiar relations each other.
When we meet who are strangers. If I say greeting with kindness to them, we are become a familiar relations each other.
>>When we meet strangers, if I greet them with kindness, we can become more familiar with each other.
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