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Should people get plastic surgery to make themselves have a better self-image? Why?
I think if people can get a better self-image by getting plasic surgery, then there is no problem in getting it. However, in our society, some gets plastic surgery hoping that it will help them get better odds in winning a competition called \'employment\' or \'promotion\'. Such reasons are no different from compelling of society. Unfortunetly, we often confuse it to gaining self-esteem. Getting plastic surgery is a big event in anyone\'s life, and it has to be thought over carefully. If someone is sure that he/she decided to get plastic surgery on his/her own will, we have absolutely no right to criticise about their call. Overall, I think people should get plastic surgery if they are sure that it is necessary, and it can make themselves have a better self-image.
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Should people get plastic surgery to make themselves have a better self-image? Why?
I think if people can get a better self-image by getting plastic surgery, then there is no problem in getting it.
I think if people can get a better self-image by getting plastic surgery, then there is no problem in getting it.
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However, in our society, some get plastic surgery hoping that it will help them get better odds in winning a competition called \'employment\' or \'promotion\'.
>>> CORRECT
Such reasons are no different from compelling of society.
>>> CORRECT
Unfortunately, we often confuse it to gaining self-esteem.
>>> CORRECT
Getting plastic surgery is a big event in anyone\'s life, and it has to be thought over carefully.
>>> CORRECT
If someone is sure that he/she decided to get plastic surgery on his/her own will, we have absolutely no right to criticize about their call.
>>> CORRECT
Overall, I think people should get plastic surgery if they are sure that it is necessary, and it can make themselves have a better self-image.
>>> CORRECT
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