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I don\'t think so, but I think age has something to do with experiencing time-related to maturity.
Everyone gets older and doesn\'t mature.
In fact, we can often meet unmatured adults around us.
They are rude to young people, tell them they know better.
Age only give us time.
How you spend that time varies from person to person.
Someone spends that time with precious experiences or learn life, but others spend their time as time goes by.
There is a wise saying \'go as time goes by\', but it doesn\'t mean that not doing anything over time.
I think it means that we can not change fate or things outside of my power, but if we struggle and work hard with what we\'re given, we can reach the summit.
Surely the summit is very different according to person.
For someone, it can be money, honor, peace, happiness.
In Korea, we have a culture when we meet a new person, ask her/his age, we call \'elders first\'.
Everything changes, and I think it is one of the cultures that must change in the future.
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Hi [이름],
Awesome response to the homework question. Thanks for sharing your opinion:)
-Rachel
I don\'t think so, but I think age has something to do with experiencing time-related to maturity.
>> correct
Everyone gets older and doesn\'t mature.
Everyone gets older and doesn\'t mature.
>> Everyone who gets older doesn\'t always mature.
In fact, we can often meet unmatured adults around us.
In fact, we can often meet unmatured adults around us.
>> In fact, we often meet immature adults around us.
They are rude to young people, tell them they know better.
They are rude to young people, tell them they know better.
>> correct
>> They are rude and act all-knowing.
Age only gives us time.
Age only gives us time.
>> correct
How you spend that time varies from person to person.
How you spend that time varies from person to person.
>> correct (awesome)
Someone spends that time with precious experiences or learn life, but others spend their time as time goes by.
Someone spends that time with precious experiences or learn life, but others spend their time as time goes by.
>> Someone spends that time gaining precious experiences or learn life, but others spend their time idly.
There is a wise saying \'go as time goes by\', but it doesn\'t mean not doing anything over time.
There is a wise saying \'go as time goes by\', but it doesn\'t mean not doing anything over time.
>> correct
I think it means that we can not change fate or things outside of my power, but if we struggle and work hard with what we\'re given, we can reach the summit.
I think it means that we can not change fate or things outside of my power, but if we struggle and work hard with what we\'re given, we can reach the summit.
>> correct (wow!perfect!)
Surely the summit is very different according to person.
Surely the summit is very different according to person.
>> Surely the summit is very different for each person or individually.
For someone, it can be money, honor, peace, happiness.
>> correct
In Korea, we have a culture when we meet a new person, ask her/his age, we call \'elders first\'.
In Korea, we have a culture when we meet a new person, ask her/his age, we call \'elders first\'.
>> In Korea, we have a culture that when we meet a new person, we ask her/his age; we call it \'elders first\'.
Everything changes, and I think it is one of the cultures that must change in the future.
Everything changes, and I think it is one of the cultures that must change in the future.
>> correct
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