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What would you do differently if there were 30 hours in a day?
If i have 30 hours in a day, i would work out much more than now for my healthy life. Even if i have a lot of time, it is not worth with out health. I do exercise for weight trainning but, I need to do more for my body balance and healthy. Because of my unbalanced body, i felt hurt my back sometimes and I started weight trainning. Despite I know I need to do more for my body, I feel ahame to spend my time for exercise. Eventually, I will do exercise more if i have more enough time like I have 30hours in a day.
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If i have 30 hours in a day, i would work out much more than now for my healthy life.
>> If I have 30 hours in a day, I would work out much more than now to have a healthy life.
Even if i have a lot of time, it is not worth with out health.
>> Even if I have a lot of time, it is not worth it without good health.
I do exercise for weight trainning but, I need to do more for my body balance and healthy.
>> I do weight training but, I need to do more for my body\'s balance and health.
Because of my unbalanced body, i felt hurt my back sometimes and I started weight training.
>> Because of my unbalanced body, I have backaches sometimes and that is why I started weight training.
Despite I know I need to do more for my body, I feel ahame to spend my time for exercise.
>> Despite knowing that I know I need to do more for my body, I feel ashamed to spend my time exercising.
Eventually, I will do exercise more if i have more enough time like I have 30hours in a day.
>> Eventually, I will do more exercises more if I have more time like I have 30 hours in a day.
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