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2015-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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I have been working since 1995.So I met many new employees. My team members and I made some files and reports for new employees. After reading reports, the employees can understand about my team's process. And then I teach them a easy work for months. After months, the employees have their task. but it is very difficult because many young employees don't work for a long time in my office. They want easy work. so they moved often another office.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!   You outdid yourself today! Some reminders: You can begin sentences with coordinating conjunctions (and, but, for, nor, or, so, and yet) as long as you follow these three rules for doing so: 1. Ensure that the coordinating conjunction is immediately followed by a main clause 2. Don’t use coordinating conjunctions to begin all of your sentences. Do so only when it makes your writing more effective. 3. Although commas typically follow coordinating conjunctions used in areas other than the beginning of a sentence, they should not be used after coordinating conjunctions used to open sentences unless an interrupter immediately follows.     Teacher Venus^^   I have been working since 1995.So I met many new employees. >>>I have been working since 1995 so I met many new employees. My team members and I made some files and reports for new employees. >>>CORRECT After reading reports, the employees can understand about my team\'s process. >>>CORRECT And then I teach them a easy work for months. >>>And then I teach them easy work for months. After months, the employees have their task. >>>CORRECT   but it is very difficult because many young employees don\'t work for a long time in my office.>>>But it is very difficult because many young employees don\'t work for a long time in my office.   They want easy work. so they moved often another office. >>>They want easy work so they often move to another office.

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