3-12th Homework
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I think the discipline of the children is needed to be firm.
The discipline is to correct wrong behaviors of the children, for example, having a meal, saying something and watching a TV.
The children don't have enough an endurance like adults.
They want to do something until they satisfy it.
However, if we let them go, there will be disappear rules for living with others.
We never live alone, so we have to keep the rules, which it is to get along with neighbors.
So, the parents have to be firm to discipline the children.
Sometimes ago, I had heard something about discipling the children.
It was the fact that the consistency in discipling the children is very important.
I think the consistency is same with being firm in discipling.
If parents don't have the consistency in doing something related with the children, they seem to be confuse.
So, if parents want to discipline their children, they have to get the consistency in their behaviors.
If you keep this rule, it may be good for all.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]! ^_^
Thank you very much for sharing your thoughts and opinions about our essay question for today.
I think they\'re very good.
Kids learn more when they do routinary things and same is true when it comes to disciplining.
They tend to pick up or learn things easier when routine is established.
I guess that\'s the reason why parents should be consistent with their methods when disciplining their kids.
But I think proper and timely disciplining would bring very good results. I also agree when you said being firm is very important when disciplining your children.
Anyhow, I\'m looking forward to our next class.
Keep up the good work. ^^
I\'ll see you again on Monday.
~Teacher C[이름]
I think the discipline of the children is needed to be firm.
>> I think the discipline for children should be firm.
The discipline is to correct wrong behaviors of the children, for example, having a meal, saying something and watching a TV.
>> [Do you mean]: The purpose of disciplining your children is to correct their wrong behaviors; for example, in having a meal, saying something and watching (a ) TV.
The children don\'t have enough an endurance like adults.
>> The children don\'t have enough endurance like adults.
They want to do something until they satisfy it.
>> They want to do something until they are satisfied.
However, if we let them go, there will be disappear rules for living with others.
>> [Do you mean]: However, if we let them go, the rules for living with others that we taught them will disappear.
We never live alone, so we have to keep the rules, which it is to get along with neighbors.
>> We never live alone, so we have to keep the rules, which is to get along well with our neighbors.
So, the parents have to be firm to discipline the children.
>> So, the parents have to be firm in disciplining their children.
Sometimes ago, I had heard something about discipling the children.
>> Some time ago, I had heard something about disciplining children.
It was the fact that the consistency in discipling the children is very important.
>> It was the fact that the consistency in disciplining (the) children is very important.
I think the consistency is same with being firm in discipling.
>> I think the consistency is same with being firm in disciplining.
If parents don\'t have the consistency in doing something related with the children, they seem to be confuse.
>> If parents don\'t have the consistency in doing something related with their children, they will get confused.
So, if parents want to discipline their children, they have to get the consistency in their behaviors.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> So, if parents want to discipline their children, they have to be consistent with their behaviors.
If you keep this rule, it may be good for all.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> If you keep this rule, it will yield to good results.
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