3. 14 Homework

2018-03-15 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

학생이 쓴 원문

** Writing Task ** Hypothetical Question: If you could change one major historical event, what would it be? I will not change my past but I got to know something from my akward past and in the future, I will not do that again. In the sociey group which I should stay in for quite long time, I should keep my distance and not make any enemy. In my university, my classmates are 29 and we should listen to same class for 4 years. One of my classmates has similar age with me so I tried to destroy the distance between us. He got to think I'm comfortable and he was not sensitive person so made a serious mistake to me. He said words which he shouldn't talk. He even didn't apologize for me. (He said women over 25 are out of season.) I decided to ignore him until graduation. But It's too hard to see an enemy everyday. When I will work, I will always be careful not to close so much with co-workers and also with my students. Too close relationship can make an enemy and It can be very hard to me.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

Thanks for doing your homework. Although I was expecting you to write something related to history/historical events in the past. For example: the relationship between Korea and Japan. See you tomorrow! =)



I will not change my past but I got to know something from my akward past and in the future, I will not do that again. In the sociey group which I should stay in for quite long time, I should keep my distance and not make any enemy. In my university, my classmates are 29 and we should listen to same class for 4 years. One of my classmates has similar age with me so I tried to destroy the distance between us. He got to think I\'m comfortable and he was not sensitive person so made a serious mistake to me. He said words which he shouldn\'t talk. He even didn\'t apologize for me. (He said women over 25 are out of season.) I decided to ignore him until graduation. But It\'s too hard to see an enemy everyday. When I will work, I will always be careful not to close so much with co-workers and also with my students. Too close relationship can make an enemy and It can be very hard to me.


I will not change anything from my past but if I got to know something awkward from my past and future, I will not do it again. In the society, where I should stay in for quite a long time, I should keep my distance and not argue with anyone. In my university, my classmates are 29 and we should listen to the same class for 4 years. One of my classmates has similar age with me so I tried to cut the gap between us. However, he was not sensitive person and made a serious mistake to me. He said words which isn\'t appropriate for him to tell. He didn\'t even apologize to me. I decided to ignore him then until graduation. But it\'s too difficult for me to see him everyday. When I will work, I will always be careful not to be so much close with my colleague and also my students. Too close relationship can create a problem.

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