3/14 homework

2019-03-14 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[Which do you think is our most important sense?] I think the most important sense in our cognitive ability is hearing ability. It\'s very happy to hear, see, feel by our hand. Actually, all sense is very important to live and enjoy life. But, if we have a blind eye, we should just imagine this world. If we are deaf people, we can see the beautiful world, but it will be silent and calm. I heard that generally if a person can not hear, he/she can not speak. If we can hear we can imagine the world and speak my mind and learn many things. And she/he can communicate easily with people. So, I think the most important sense is hearing. Fortunately, I have all sense now. However, we don\'t know the future. If I will lose some ability in someday, I will realize the value of the senses.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! ^ ^ Thank you for taking the time in answering your homework. I really appreciate it a lot!  ^ ^

Thank you for your thoughts on this one too! ^ ^ Indeed! All of our senses are important, we must take care and keep them healthy! ^ ^


I think the most important sense in our cognitive ability is hearing ability.

>>Correct
It\'s very happy to hear, see, feel by our hand.

>>It\'s wonderful to hear sounds.
Actually, all sense is very important to live and enjoy life.

>>Actually, all of our senses are important to live and enjoy life.

But, if we have a blind eye, we should just imagine this world.

>>Correct
If we are deaf people, we can see the beautiful world, but it will be silent and calm.

>>Correct
I heard that generally if a person can not hear, he/she can not speak.

>>Correct 
If we can hear we can imagine the world and speak my mind and learn many things.

>>If we can hear we can imagine the world and speak our minds and learn many things.
And she/he can communicate easily with people.

>>Correct
So, I think the most important sense is hearing.

>>Correct
Fortunately, I have all sense now.

>>Fortunately, I have all my senses now.

However, we don\'t know the future.

>>Correct
If I will lose some ability in someday, I will realize the value of the senses.

>>If I will lose some abilities in the future, I will realize the value of the senses.

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