3-14th Homework
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There are many inventions even though it ws not focused on them.
For example, post-it is a typical thing. Originally, it was to develope the powerful adhesive. Unfortunally, engineers could not get well. Its ability that they actually would like to develope was not satisfied with their desire. After working, they found another ability of the developed adhesive. Finally, it is post-it as you know.Just like this, although there may be fail, it is not all. Of course, if the goals that we want to carry out is accomplised, most of all it is very good.
So, I partially agree with today topic. Just like this, although there may be fail, it is not all. Of course, if the goals that we want to carry out is accomplised, most of all it is very good. The example that I previously said may be an exceptional case. There are many failure in developing. And many developed things would disapper without interests of people even if they have a good perfomance.In order to make a business, there is a factor.
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Hi, [이름]! :)A cold but nonetheless wonderful afternoon to you.
Thank you very much for writing in our composition board again today.
I agree when you said not all failures are indeed failures.
There are actually a lot of things today that were actually discovered by accident and are still being used until today.
A great example would be the medicine Penicillin which was discovered by accident by a Dr. [Name].
Penicillin is one of the world\'s first antibiotics and has truly marked a turning point in history.
It has helped cure a lot of epidemics and infections.
And up until today, modern medicine still continues to upgrade and improve this old-aged antibiotic.
Anyhow, that is my example in relation to this topic.
I hope you\'re having a great day.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름] :)
There are many inventions even though it ws not focused on them.
>> [Do you mean]: There are many inventions that were not created on purpose.
For example, post-it is a typical thing.
>> The post-it is a typical example.
OR >> For example, we have the post-it.
Originally, it was to develope the powerful adhesive.
>> Originally, it was developed to create a powerful adhesive.
Unfortunally, engineers could not get well.
>> Unfortunally, the engineers who worked in it failed.
Its ability that they actually would like to develope was not satisfied with their desire.
>> [Do you mean]: They didn\'t achieve the quality they were trying to develop in an adhesive.
After working, they found another ability of the developed adhesive.
>> After working, they found another feature of the developed adhesive.
Finally, it is post-it as you know.
>> Finally, it is now the post-it that you know.
OR >> It is has now become the post-it that many of us know.
Just like this, although there may be fail, it is not all.
>> [Do you mean]: Just like this story, not all failures are indeed a failure.
Of course, if the goals that we want to carry out is accomplised, most of all it is very good.
>> Of course, if the goals that we want to carry out are accomplised, then it is very good.So, I partially agree with today topic.
>> So, I partially agree with today\'s topic.
The example that I previously said may be an exceptional case.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The example that I previously mentioned may be an exceptional case.
There are many failure in developing.
>> There are many failures in progress.
And many developed things would disapper without interests of people even if they have a good perfomance.
>> And many developed things would disapper and people would lose interest in them even if they have a good purpose.
In order to make a business, there is a factor.
>> [Do you mean]: There are factors to consider in order to make a business.
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