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[Worst thing about the internet]

I think that the worst thing in the internet is anonymity.

>>> I think the worst thing about the internet is anonymity.
I know sometimes anonymity is good and help to the weak.

>>> I know anonymity is sometimes good  and that it helps the weak.

However, nowadays, comments from unnamed people harass many people.

>>> Correct!
Unfortunately, somebody dies due to the serious comments from unknown people who don\'t have any relationship.

>>> The worst case scenario is some people can even die due to serious comments from others who are not even related to them.
The target can be celebrity and even normal citizen who have SNS account.

>>> The target can either be a celebrity or an ordinary person who has an SNS account.

>>> OR: The target can be anyone.
The wrong rumor spreads into the whole world within just a few hours.

>>> Correct!
I think this is extremely serious social problem. 

>>> I think this is extremely a serious social problem.
We have to make more systematic online network for everyone.

>>> Correct! 
I know it is not so simple question, but we have to do make better online environment.

>>> I know it is not a simple thing to do but we have to make a better online environment.