3.16 homework

2023-03-17 · 첨삭 강사 Jhozel

학생이 쓴 원문

For domestic is I want to recommend Busan and jeju island. That’s why I like sea. And with my friend drink on the sand by the sea it is very romantic. And that place is famous for tourist. So that places is develop for tour. So it is very convince if it is first time to visit. And for abroad I recommend Thailand. Because it is famous tour country, and it is very comfortable. Thai massage is famous too. And also there is many pub. So if I want to enjoy travel, I can use that store.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ye [이름]!

Thanks for doing your best in writing your homework!

That sound very interesting! I hope you can travel again soon!
Anyway, have a great weekend!

-T.Jhozel

For domestic is I want to recommend Busan and jeju island.

>> Correct!
OR: I recommend Busan and Jeju Island for domestic travel.

That’s why I like sea. And with my friend drink on the sand by the sea it is very romantic.

>>That\'s why I enjoy the sea. And having a drink on the sand by the sea with a friend is very romantic.

And that place is famous for tourist. So that places is develop for tour.

>> And the place is well-known among tourists. So, those locations are being developed for tours.

So it is very convince if it is first time to visit.

>> So it is very convincing if this is your first visit.

And for abroad I recommend Thailand. Because it is famous tour country, and it is very comfortable.

>>In terms of travel abroad, I recommend Thailand. Because it is a popular tourist destination and is very comfortable.

Thai massage is famous too. And also there is many pub. So if I want to enjoy travel, I can use that store.

>>Thai massage is also popular. There are also a lot of pubs. So if I want to travel, I can go to that store.

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