3/17 homework
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Yes, I think that the Olympic games should be postponed.
All people know that this coronavirus state is very serious and we should control very carefully to keep human peace.
International gatherings and conferences are being canceled now.
Any conference has never been canceled since I started to research.
So, I realized that this situation is very serious.
I know that the Olympic game is a very important event in the world.
However, we should think about what is the most important thing to keep society and its peace.
Maybe the most important thing is survival or minimization of sacrifice.
Besides, I worry about the radioactivity safety of the place where the Olympic game will be held in Japan.
It was already reported that the radioactivity level of Fukushima is very higher than the standard value.
I think that Japan wants to hold the Olympic game in Fukushima for political purposes without considering public health.
Therefore, even if it will be postponed, the venue must be changed.
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Thanks as always for responding to the homework given you:) All the ideas are amazing and I totally agree with your views:)
-Rachel
Yes, I think that the Olympic games should be postponed.
>> correct
All people know that this coronavirus state is very serious and we should control very carefully to keep human peace.
All people know that this coronavirus state is very serious and we should control very carefully to keep human peace.
>>Everybody knows that this pandemic is very serious and we should control it for humans to survive and keep their peace.
International gatherings and conferences are being canceled now.Any conference has never been canceled since I started to research.So, I realized that this situation is very serious.
International gatherings and conferences are being canceled now.Any conference has never been canceled since I started to research.So, I realized that this situation is very serious.
>> correct
I know that the Olympic game is a very important event in the world. However, we should think about what is the most important thing to keep society and its peace.
I know that the Olympic game is a very important event in the world. However, we should think about what is the most important thing to keep society and its peace.
>> correct (awesome sentence)
Maybe the most important thing is survival or minimization of sacrifice. Besides, I worry about the radioactivity safety of the place where the Olympic game will be held in Japan.
>> correct
It was already reported that the radioactivity level of Fukushima is much higher than the standard value.
It was already reported that the radioactivity level of Fukushima is much higher than the standard value.
>> correct (we just replace very to much)
I think that Japan wants to hold the Olympic game in Fukushima for political purposes without considering public health.
Therefore, even if it will be postponed, the venue must be changed.
I think that Japan wants to hold the Olympic game in Fukushima for political purposes without considering public health.
Therefore, even if it will be postponed, the venue must be changed.
>> correct
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