3/2 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Many scientists have a religion in the world.
It is quite ironic, but it\'s true.
If someone asks me \'do you believe God alive?\', I will say \'I don\'t believe that\'.
I think so.
People who have a strong faith say that science is also part of religion and God makes that.
In that case, they find a good point to get along well.
Actually, I believe that religion was created to gather people, make a society or country, and keep the peace for a long time.
There are many kinds of God in the world, Buddhism, Christian, Catholicism, Islam, and so on.
I feel all kinds of God have a similarity.
Nonetheless, I like doctrine of Buddhism.
They say that both happiness and misery come from my heart, not others.
Therefore, we should control the mind and make a healthy mind.
I absolutely agree about that.
Besides, the reason why I think it\'s better to have a religion is that I can count on it when I am in trouble and modest when I am good.
Everything I have accomplished is not just from me.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
Thanks for the insightful homework because I am also learning:)
-Rachel
Many scientists have a religion in the world. It is quite ironic, but it\'s true.
>> correct
If someone asks me \'do you believe God alive?\', I will say \'I don\'t believe that\'.
>> If someone asks me if God exists, I will respond that I don\'t.
I think so. People who have a strong faith say that science is also part of religion and God makes that.
I think so. People who have a strong faith say that science is also part of religion and God makes that.
>> correct
In that case, they find a good point to get along well.
>> correct
Actually, I believe that religion was created to gather people, make a society or country, and keep the peace for a long time.
Actually, I believe that religion was created to gather people, make a society or country, and keep the peace for a long time.
>> correct
>> The truth is I believe religion was created to unite people and make a peaceful society for a long time.
There are many kinds of God in the world, Buddhism, Christian, Catholicism, Islam, and so on.
There are many kinds of God in the world, Buddhism, Christian, Catholicism, Islam, and so on.
>> There are many kinds of religion in the world: Buddhism, Christian, Catholicism, Islam, and so on.
>> There are many kinds of gods in the world: Buddha, God, Allah and many more.
I feel all kinds of God have a similarity.
I feel all kinds of God have a similarity.
>> correct
Nonetheless, I like the doctrine of Buddhism.
>> correct
They say that both happiness and misery come from my heart, not others.
They say that both happiness and misery come from my heart, not others.
>> correct
Therefore, we should control the mind and make a healthy mind.
>> correct
>> Therefore we should control the mind and make it healthy.
I absolutely agree about that.
I absolutely agree about that.
>> I absolutely agree with that.
Besides, the reason why I think it\'s better to have a religion is that I can count on it when I am in trouble and modest when I am good.
Besides, the reason why I think it\'s better to have a religion is that I can count on it when I am in trouble and modest when I am good.
>> correct
>> and I can count on it when I am in trouble, and it makes me modest when I am good.
Everything I have accomplished is not just from me.
Everything I have accomplished is not just from me.
>> correct
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.