3/20 homework
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The major tourist attraction is gyeongju in our country.
Gyeongju is usually visited there when we were teenage.
Because there are many historical places.
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Travelling adds flavor to life as you travel to different places that have a different culture and lifestyle. Also, it\'s an easy way to learn about the culture and tradition of a place. Besides, for many areas, tourism is their main source of income.
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The major tourist attraction is gyeongju in our country.
>> The major tourist attraction in Korea is in Gyeongju.
Gyeongju is usually visited there when we were teenage.
>> We often traveled to Gyeongju when we were teenagers.
Because there are many historical places.
>> Because of many historical places there.
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